Kia Ora Elisha, You have completed a very informative and indepth slideshow that shows your critical thinking skills! I especially like the way that I can tell you have found a text, read it thoroughly and put it into your own words. You have not only given very detailed sentences, you have also been able to organised those sentences into well though-out paragraphs. These paragraphs make your work very easy to follow Elisha.
You have chosen some awesome examples of people who demonstrated Manaakitanga and I learnt a lot from this slideshow! Thank you for your Mahi on this.
Next steps: - Always remember to re-read your work out loud. There are a few spelling mistakes and sentences that could be re-worded to make more sense. (not many though) - Try and include your opinion a bit more. I can tell you are excellent at researching! Now I want to see how you relate to the work you are doing. Think about examples closer to home and situations in your life where you witnessed someone showing Manaakitanga.
Over all, you have done an excellent job! Keep it up gal!
Kia Ora Elisha,
ReplyDeleteYou have completed a very informative and indepth slideshow that shows your critical thinking skills! I especially like the way that I can tell you have found a text, read it thoroughly and put it into your own words. You have not only given very detailed sentences, you have also been able to organised those sentences into well though-out paragraphs. These paragraphs make your work very easy to follow Elisha.
You have chosen some awesome examples of people who demonstrated Manaakitanga and I learnt a lot from this slideshow! Thank you for your Mahi on this.
Next steps:
- Always remember to re-read your work out loud. There are a few spelling mistakes and sentences that could be re-worded to make more sense. (not many though)
- Try and include your opinion a bit more. I can tell you are excellent at researching! Now I want to see how you relate to the work you are doing. Think about examples closer to home and situations in your life where you witnessed someone showing Manaakitanga.
Over all, you have done an excellent job! Keep it up gal!
Hello Nikita
DeleteSorry for the late respond, thank you for the feedback you have gave me next time I'll make sure to do those things.